Tuesday, September 24, 2013

FSF Challenge - Wild

Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:


Another poem. Had a little trouble with this one - took a while to make it work. I might revisit this at some point and try to get the flow a bit better... Six verses, five sentences.

The Wind In The Grass

Image "Dune Grass at Assateague" - Copyright K. R. Smith 2013 - may be used with attribution

With a muted moan
The wind carries the fragrance of a silver-green sea
To the shore.

And on the beach,
Ivory flowers of foam take flight, blown by gentle gusts,
Scattering moist petals along their path.

Then over the sand the air swirls,
Drifting a myriad of tiny grains into an undulating mound
Flowing around unkempt tufts of grass sprouting beyond the reach of the tide.

Twirling in the breeze,
Their slender blades sway
In time with its siren song.

Finally, the cool mist caresses you
While dancing across the dunes,
Hair flowing around your soft curves,

As natural and wild
As the wind in the grass
That forever whispers your name.

                         K. R. Smith

© 2012-2013 K. R. Smith All rights reserved


  1. That's lovely!!! You have such a beautiful way with words. That was fantastic!!

    1. Thanks! It still has a few rough spots that don't flow quite as well as I'd like, but it was a hard poem for me to write and I'll have to think about it some before I do any more to it.

  2. Flowing with the Bard, I feel to ask: What is in a name? Why the whisper of the wind, and the undulating grains of the sand, always bring the memory of a name... ?

    You draw such a beautiful image, the wild Nature moving evenly into the wild being whose name awake echos of happy reminiscence.

    Very beautiful!

    1. Thanks!

      The narrator see her in nature and nature in her, different but together. The beauty in one is part of the other. And what's more beautiful than a girl at the beach?


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