Thursday, October 31, 2013

FSF Challenge - Erased



Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:

 Erased




A dark story, perhaps appropriate for the times...





Manual Deletion


Image from http://lilliemcferrin.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/10/face5-2.jpg



     To most, he was just another face in the crowd until he disappeared one night. After that, his name was spoken everywhere, but only in the hushed tones of frightened people who were now his followers, followers of a man most had never seen and never would. There was no explanation coming from the government, and none brave enough to ask, but those in power were unwilling to risk that someone might. They ordered the electronic commands issued that would traverse every network, invade every system, remove any connection to those who knew him, and delete every record of his existence. Slowly, the man who was just another face in the crowd became the man without a face at all.



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8 comments:

  1. Wow, thought provoking, great endline;
    Slowly, the man who was just another face in the crowd became the man without a face at all.

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    1. Thanks! I don't often use the image Lillie supplies in the challenge, but it just seemed to work this time.

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  2. Those first two lines are some of the finest I've read in the last little while.

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    1. Perhaps I got lucky or you haven't read much lately, but I'll take it either way! Thanks!

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  3. Yes, that final line is really thought-provoking. This is really quite sinister... Great imagination!

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    1. That last line sort of wrote itself. And, yes, it is sinister!

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  4. I was trying, with no success, not to relate your deeply ominous tale with human fate.

    I think that somewhere there is a big eraser to be rubbed onto each one of us... just to make room! :)

    Poor attempt to joke about a wonderfully written story! Just trying to keep it to be not somber enough, but your text is matchless!

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    1. Your comments are always welcome here. You have such a unique perspective and a unique way of expressing them!

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