Thursday, May 15, 2014

FSF Challenge - Innocence



Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:

Innocence

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie posts one word for inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.



Into this house we're born, into this world we're thrown... 

Same lyric as last time, but a different story.




Journey


Image "Cesarean Section" courtesy of arztsamui at www.freedigitalphotos.net


    Before sixteen years had passed on this Earth, Kara found herself deserted, surrounded by strangers, and afraid. So much in love, or so she thought, she was willing to give him whatever he wanted, but she never thought he would want someone else. When he left, her pride, her dignity, her innocence—all vanished before the tears had time to dry. As they wheeled the gurney into a room to take care of the only thing he had left behind, there were no emotions on her face, only a blank stare at the ceiling. When it was over, however, and Kara held the squirming little bundle in her arms, she somehow found all that had been lost within the glow of her daughter's tiny face.



Image "Cesarean Section" courtesy of arztsamui / FreeDigitalPhotos.net


© 2012-2014 K. R. Smith All rights reserved

12 comments:

  1. Stories like these are always good for a parent to read. Well done.

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    1. Thank you! Parents can go through some rough times watching their kids grown up.

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  2. What a beautiful story. And, of course, the "surprise ending" makes it a keeper.

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  3. What a wonderful story, it captures the prompt so well, I really love this.

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    1. Thank you! I was hoping to get a mix if emotions for this one.

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    1. I could end so sadly, but I wanted a happy ending!

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  5. Oh, this was absolutely beautiful. I was so afraid she was going to abort the baby, but you took a horribly sad story and turned it into a thing of beauty, which really shows your great gift of storytelling.

    Here's my response to the prompt:
    http://cshowers.wordpress.com/2014/05/17/stolen-innocence/

    God bless you,
    Cheryl

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    1. Thank you! Even though I generally write horror, I couldn't do it for this one!

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  6. I was expecting the worst and you gave the best. Well done!

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  7. What a beautiful, emotional tale! And gorgeous ending!!

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