Thursday, November 21, 2013

FSF Challenge - Pieces



Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:

 Pieces



The horror anthology,
Gothic Blue Book III - Graveyard Edition by Burial Day Books,
includes my poem, The Ballad of Drunken Jack.
Available on Amazon for Kindle or in paperback.



This one's dark and short. I've been trying to cut the length on some of my stories. I've always been envious of those who can do these challenges in just a few words.




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     The flash lasted but for a split-second, the sound barely longer. Now only smoke lingered as a reminder of their brief existence. Those still standing wandered about in shocked silence. The unfortunate ones, their lives as shattered as the glass that shredded their bodies, were scattered among the debris. It was a message, but no one understood its meaning or knew the intended recipient.


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11 comments:

  1. This is powerful, especially, "their lives as shattered as the glass that shredded their bodies." Great imagery.

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    1. Thanks! I rewrote that sentence five times before I got it to what I have here. If I tried to write a novel the same way I write FSF posts, it would take me about 400 years.

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    1. Thanks! And thanks for taking the time to coment!

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  3. Quite vivid description of the aftermath from a group of terrorists.

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    1. Thanks! Lillie's prompt picture is what gave me the idea.

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  4. Very well written and great imagery.

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    1. Thanks! I don't know if you've been by here before (always great to see a new reader for the FSF posts), but thanks for reading and commenting!

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  5. Excellent and powerful imagery, and concise, too! Bravo, K R.

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    1. Thanks! I'm sure I'll get all long-wnded on the next one, though!

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    2. That should be "long-winded." I was a little too concise in my comment!

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