Saturday, July 13, 2013

FSF Challenge - Locked



Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:

 Locked



Getting back to a more serious side this week...




The Locked Box


Modified image "Letter And Key" courtesy of Simon Howden at www.freedigitalphotos.net

Though her father had always treated her well, especially so after her mother had died, being there when needed and seldom interfering except when a kind word of advice was prudent, curiosity had overcome her sense of betrayal as she entered his room. Laura had found the key to the small metal box he kept in the back of his closet, a box she had never seen opened, the one that caused him to skirt any question concerning its contents, and while he was out, she would finally learn what secrets it held. When she lifted the lid, there didn't seem to be anything of real interest—certainly nothing he would need to hide—as it was mostly old receipts and insurance papers. She was browsing through the last few pieces, however, when she came across the results of a DNA test proving she couldn't possibly be his daughter, nearly dropping the box as she read her name on the report. As the implications of the words unfolded within her mind, Laura realized he had accepted her anyway, without prejudice, perhaps needing her as much as she needed him; so she closed the box, carefully turned the key to make certain it was locked, and returned it to the exact spot on the shelf from which it came, praying it would never be opened again.



Modified image "Letter And Key" courtesy of Simon Howden / FreeDigitalPhotos.net


© 2012-2013 K. R. Smith All rights reserved

14 comments:

  1. Ah, she will worry now forever.
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/07/12/five-sentence-fiction-fsf-locked-pg13/

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    1. Perhaps, but she will always know how much her "father" cared for her.

      Thanks for reading!

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  2. This is beautiful and poignant. I really enjoy your writing.

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    1. Thanks so much!

      I wish I had more time to write - I'm behind in getting a poem and a short story ready for submission - there's been too much going on!

      But I really think I get a lot out of these FSF posts - both reading and writing them.

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    1. I don't often get a "wow" for anything, so it is greatly appreciated!

      Thanks for reading and the comment. I may have to print it out and frame it!

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  4. What do they say about curiosity?.. Great story!

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    1. It's bad for cats - and sometimes, relationships... I hope this one stays good.

      Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  5. A beautiful tale of acceptance, warmed the cockles of my heart!

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    1. Thanks! Sometimes two people can keep a secret if there is the desire to do so.

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  6. I love the journey of her curiosity, her shock and then her acceptance and realisation of their relationship. Great story and writing. xx

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    1. Thanks! I was glad I was able to get a full story in and bot just a scene - but it wasn't easy. Laura went through a lot in those five sentences!

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  7. Very touching. Family is greater and stronger than DNA.

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    1. A good family is, for certain!

      Thanks for reading and commenting!

      P.S. - I liked your profile!

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