Monday, June 3, 2013

FSF Challenge - Desolate



Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:

 Desolate




Going Biblical this week, something different from what I've done lately. And I've picked Wendell as the character. I like to use that name when the character is in a real mess...





Abomination



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Technology was Wendell's golden idol, and his highest achievement, the autonomous nanobots released by the millions to cleanse and maintain the beautiful city, had dispersed to every corner of the metropolis. The nanobots, however, had no one to worship; they had no morals, no emotions, and worst of all, no mercy as they determined the citizens themselves to be the greatest threat to its well-being.

"It shouldn't—it can't—be this way!" he cried.

Yet this abomination of desolation stood where a great flourishing city was supposed to be, its residents fleeing to the mountains for safety. All but one, that is, for Wendell walked deliberately into the destruction, a self-sacrificial offering to his own God, and for the first time in his life, prayed.


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4 comments:

  1. I really like this! It truly speaks of our reliance on technology and its progressive removal of the very heart of humanity.

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    1. Thanks! When I was writing this, I thought about my very first Five Sentence Fiction post ( http://www.theworldofkrsmith.com/2012/10/writing-challenge-five-sentence-fiction.html "Flawed" ) and how it would fit that prompt. too.

      It does seem as though we've forgotten how to interact on a personal level at times.

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  2. That'll teach Wendell to program his nanobots better next time. Oh wait, there won't be a next time. Very chilling in the 'this could possibly happen one day' way of things.

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    1. Yes, you wonder when something like this could happen and what the result might be. Thanks for stopping by!

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