Thursday, May 2, 2013

FSF Challenge - Festival


Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:

 Festival



Another dark one...

Also, if I don't get around to reading and commenting on your FSF post, don't take it personally! I've been doing a lot of overtime for my day job these last two months and haven't been able to spend much time on the blogs.





The Festival



Image "Young Beautiful Woman Sleeping With Flowers Outdoor" courtesy of Just2shutter at www.freedigitalphotos.net


"Yes, it certainly is a beautiful day for the festival," the old man exclaimed. "So much color, music, flowers - and so many people here to enjoy it all!"

A young woman, clothed in a simple white dress, stood grimly silent by his side.

"Come now, dear girl, and put on a better face for the day," he pleaded as the sound of logs being stacked for a fire echoed across the grounds. "Although I must confess, I can't blame you," he added while running the garroting cord through his fingers, "as you're the one who is to be sacrificed."



Image "Young Beautiful Woman Sleeping With Flowers Outdoor" courtesy of Just2shutter / FreeDigitalPhotos.net


© 2012-2013 K. R. Smith All rights reserved

14 comments:

  1. Ahh. Great writing.
    THere's always a touch of dark in there. Love it! But, I'm sure the hero will come along and save her. :D

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    1. That's because you're a romance writer! And he'll get there in the nick of time! And that would work!

      For me, perhaps her spirit will come back to torture her killers, or something equally pleasant...

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  2. Yes, that would tend to bum one out. Why is it always the poor girl who gets sacrificed? Why not a corporate CEO? You're right. The gods would just spit him back. Good piece, KR.

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    1. A sacrifice is an offering, and you want the offering to be something worthwhile! Offering up some unkempt guy who burps a lot and walks around with his butt-crack hanging out won't get you much in return... plus it's not nearly as much fun to write about (at least for me).

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    1. Not every girl wants to be the center of attention...

      Thanks for stopping by and commenting!

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  4. Though dark, well written. Reminiscent of The Lottery, it made me want to know more about these people, including the girl.

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    1. Thanks! Five sentences don't allow for much of a background, but I wonder, too, how the girl ended up in this situation.

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  5. Ouch! But, love the dark!
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/05/02/fsf-five-sentence-fiction-522013/

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    1. Thanks! But I must say, I don't have much of a chance being nominated for the "Super Sweet Blog" award like you! Well, not with these postings!

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  6. You write dark well. Made me shiver. Don't think I'd want to know my fate in advance. Well maybe...to have a heart attack before I could be killed. ;-O

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    1. Thanks! And yes, knowing your fate ahead of time isn't so nice - you'll find your imagination is far too good for your own sanity.

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  7. Ha! I love how the story tuned dark.

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    1. Yes, there's something deeply disturbing about meeting a cheerful executioner - especially when he's yours...!

      Thanks for reading and commenting!

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