Thursday, February 7, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction Challenge - Purple



This week's writing challenge from Five Sentence Fiction ( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt "purple."

I thought I'd try something different this time, channeling Mickey Spillane a bit.






Matching Accessories


"Fashion Luxury Portrait Of Young Girl Teenager In Purple Style D" by David Castillo Dominici / www.freedigitalphotos.net



There wasn't much light inside that dingy backstreet bar, but there was no mistaking who it was when she walked in wearing that same little dress, the one that looked like it was painted on, the one she always wore when she wanted something, and although I didn't know what it was, any chance of refusing disappeared the second I saw her body shrink-wrapped in that silky thing. The way she had of looking skanky and classy all at the same time was more than most men could handle, including me. It had been over a year since she'd left, but my gut was telling me it might as well have been yesterday. Still, she was the one who asked to meet, and I was a little surprised when she just stood there biting her lip as I asked, "How's it going?" I must have been more distracted than I thought because it wasn't until she moved closer that I noticed the dress was nearly the same shade of purple as the shiner around her left eye.



Image courtesy of David Castillo Dominici / FreeDigitalPhotos.net


© 2012-2013 K. R. Smith All rights reserved

9 comments:

  1. Well, that was interesting, with a little twist there at the end.
    McGuffy's Reader
    http://www.mcguffysreader.blogspot.com

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. But was it interesting in a good way, or interesting in a bad way?

      Delete
  2. I can imagine the voice over to this little scene like in vintage American detective drama's; Mike Hammer but I keep seeing Humphrey Bogart??? Beautifully written, flowing so smoothly, creating mood and atmosphere as well as the setting. I really enjoyed this take on purple.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Yeah, I see what you mean. I can see Bogart doing this...

      "Of all the gin joints in all the towns in all the world, she walks into my Five Sentence Fiction story - wearing that purple dress."

      Thanks!

      Delete
    2. It's the mood you create. Very moviesque (is that a word and how do you spell it????)

      Delete
    3. I don't think it's "officially" recognized, but I've seen it used. I think everyone will know what you mean!

      I was just thinking, Casablanca was released 70 years ago, and people are still quoting it. No computer-generated scenes in that movie!

      Delete
  3. Interesting ending! I'm definitely left wanting to know the details of this story!!!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thanks! I almost feel like writing some more of this story so I can find out more. Maybe it was one of those women in the other writer's stories. Now that would be a challenge - put out a prompt and have each participant add a five-sentence "chapter."

      Delete
    2. Now, that's a really interesting idea!!

      Delete

Please feels free to post a comment!
Note: All comments will be moderated and will not be shown unless approved. Inappropriate comments will be removed.