Thursday, November 29, 2012

FSF Challenge - Joy



This week's writing challenge from Five Sentence Fiction ( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt "Joy."

Looks like it won't be a "horror" week - even I have trouble doing a dark story about "joy."

But I might try...

Nonetheless, we do have a multiple feature post ( 3 - count 'em - 3 ) this time around! All these ideas have been done in some fashion by others, but it was still a fun challenge.




The Flight


"Airplane In The Sky" by coward_lion - www.freedigitalphotos.net


They rode to the airport together as soon as they heard that Flight 718 had crashed during takeoff and there were believed to be no survivors. All they could think of is how they'd repeatedly hammered into their indolent daughter how important it was to take the trip, to do the interview, to make that extra effort to be there on time. The woman, hands trembling, pulled out her cell phone to call her daughter's number one last time, a call made for no other reason than hear her child's voice on the answering machine. But there was no message, only the mumbling of a sleepy young woman pleading, "Oh, God, Mom, I know you're going to kill me! I forgot to set the alarm!"


Image "Airplane In The Sky" courtesy of coward_lion / FreeDigitalPhotos.net



The Last Date


"Woman Reading Sms In Cell Phone" by Jomphong - www.freedigitalphotos.net


She wasn't sure why he had asked to meet her here, at this place, on this street, a street along which she had walked a hundred times, a street with nothing of singular significance or interest. She had noticed how preoccupied Derek had been the last few weeks, and all she could think of was he wanted to break up. Still, there they were, face to face, he as visibly uncomfortable as one could be, her feeling as if everything inside her had been ripped out.

"I guess this wasn't such a great idea," Derek said nervously, looking everywhere but in Jessica's eyes, "and you're probably going to think I'm a real jerk for doing this here. But," he added, stuttering slightly, "it's the spot where I saw you for the very first time, and it's the only place I could think of to ask you marry me."


Image "Woman Reading Sms In Cell Phone" courtesy of Jomphong / FreeDigitalPhotos.net



The Dress


"Ball Gown" courtesy of Rosen Georgiev - www.freedigitalphotos.net


"You talk to your daughter while I find out what idiot keeps banging at the door," he said, a stern look on his face.

"Look, Mom, I've spent all this money on a dress I'll never wear because I'm not going to the prom because no one has asked me or even thought about asking me and I'm going to look like a loser to everyone in the school."

"Cathy, honey, maybe you could ask your friends if they know anyone that might be interested - or you could just go by yourself and meet the other kids there." 

"You know, Mom, I'd like to have at least one date, one real date in high school where I might even get kissed or something like a normal girl has by my age, and - and why does Dad have to be standing here listening to this? 

"Because, Cathy, I thought you might like to know that the idiot at the door is a boy that would like to talk with you."


Image "Ball Gown" courtesy of Rosen Georgiev / FreeDigitalPhotos.net

© 2012 K. R. Smith   All rights reserved

13 comments:

  1. It's interesting, isn't it, how joy is only available to us after we've known the exact opposite emotion. It's a hopeful thought :) Nicely captured, KR.

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    1. After writing these three stories, I realized that none of them actually had "joy" within the main story - that would all hit in the sixth sentence if I had one. It reminds me of that Buddhist concept - that we can't understand reality because we have nothing to compare it with. With joy, however, life certainly gives us enough of the other side with which the comparison may be made. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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    2. You may not have written the word joy, but I felt it in each of them! Especially in the first, as a parent that joy would have had me on my knees! I loved all three stories.
      And I think we do need to know sorrow to understand and appreciate joy!

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  2. I like it that the joy is incipient.

    Well done x 3. The first is especially poignant.

    Cheers!
    JzB

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    1. I think we have a winner. Everybody seems to like the first one. I would assume it's because it has the greatest contrast between joy and despair.

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  3. I think your last comment is right, the feeling of joy would be the next immediate thing, but you wonderfully captured scenes leading up to wonderful joy.

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    1. Thanks! And if I had to write that next sentence, I'm not sure I would be able to write it as well as the reader feels it without the sentence.

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  4. Oh, i love that first one. Yikes.

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    1. And as an accomplished romance writer, I thought you'd like #2! Thanks for reading, Bethanne! I'm just trying to keep up with you!

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  5. Wow ---three for the price of one. I especially liked the first one with that twist. Nice work!

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    1. Well, everyone else was having sales on Thanksgiving, so I decided to join in! Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  6. I loved the reverse take you did on joy, it showing itself only in the "reveal" at the end, up until that point looking very much absent! Well done, I thought all three were great stories, I'm a sucker for happy endings. :-)

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    1. Having only five sentences makes it difficult to devote an equal amount to the joyous and non-joyous parts of the story, so I cheat a little and leave some of it in the reader's mind. I also have a tendency to write stories that way - I think I need to work on that. Not that it's bad, it's just that I don't want to only write in that style (I guess it's a style...). Thanks for reading!

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